MunJinGon/First Draft/Wed 11:00~12:50

Development of  technology has affected a lot of entertainment area aroud the world. People can explore cyber-space and people have been more interested in it  as days go by. Computer game is one of the entertainment in cyber-space. Game industry called E-sports has developed radically and it has attracted many people by its own ways. Then, what  makes people be attracted to game? People play computer games for various reasons : exitemenent, social life, or money.

 

First, many people enjoy playing games just for fun. It is main purpose for many people and fundamental reason for games. Releasing stress is one of the benefits that excitement from game gives us. People can experience what  they can do in real world in games. It  makes people feel thrilled or excited. In this process, stress can be relieved. Game often makes time go fast. It  helps us spend time for cheap price when people are bored. 

 

Another reason for playing games is to make new relationship. Especailly for Korean men, it is one of the best way to be familiar with others. In research from KOCCA(Korean Creative Content  Agency), the average number of visiting Internet cafe in 2010 is 6 days per month. And about 80% of people who visit  Internet cafe, playing games is main reasons for it. It show that many people enjoy games and it can help people make familiar through sharing same hobby. Also, they can make new friends easily in games. Game is the great environment  to make new friends.   

 

Finally, for some people, earning money can be a sufficient  reason to play games. In Internet  broadcast  system such as Afreea TV, Twitch TV, playing games is one of the most popular contents. 'BJ'(people who perform internet  broadcast  system) can earn money by audience's support or advertisement for sponsor. For example, in Afreeca TV, 'star balloon' is the coin which cost 100 won for each balloon. The amount  of  balloon audience gave is tremendous. Royjo, one of  the game 'BJ' in Afreeca TV, make 50 million won in a month. Another way to make money by game is to participate in contest. It might  seem to be for professional game players, but  there are many small open competition for ordinary people. Internet cafe game contest is good example for it.

 

To sum up, people have different reasons for playing games. For many of them, seeking for amusement. is the most  common reason for it. However, social relationship can be one of  the main reasons for game. Others play games for financial reason.

Yeji Oh / First draft / wed34

Must teenagers need plastic surgery? -plastic surgery should be banned for teenagers   Recently, many of teenagers have dreams of flipping their whole life by changing their outlooks . students think that better looking helps them to  be able to enter better university or get a better career in the future. Also, According to recent Seoul research, 54% of female and 42.5% of male students think that plastic surgery is the best way to improve their beauty. But many of the people including surgeons recommend teenagers should not do plastic surgery because of the physical, psychological and economical reasons first, It is because teenagers' bodies are still keep growing and changing. Bones keep growing until 18-21 in average and mostly it is growing until older ages. However, if teenagers do plastic surgery, they cut their skin or bones. So, because they're still keep growing, on the other hands, their bones are fixed by surgery, It can destroy body and face's shape. And even sometimes it can cause infection and even bring them on serious danger. Another common reason is because of teenagers' mind. First, that their identity is not yet fixed. Teenagers are greatly influenced by media. So their surgery has trend. For example, When drama "high-kick" was popular among teenagers, the plastic surgery to look like the main character increased. And after few months, It decreased a lot and they want to have surgeries again to be like those popular beautiful singers and actresses. What students did was just regret their past choice or do the surgery again. Lastly, minors' plastic surgery is not recommended because of financial burden. Plastic surgery costs a lot and it can over hanging the economy of their family. it already costs a lot for students' education and necessities of their lives. In fact, doing the surgery is not the necessity and must-do-thing, it just bothers the parents and family because of their greed. In conclusion, teenagers' plastic should be banned, because their body, mind, and economic capacity is not yet prepared for their own big choice. Instead, they have to find out solutions for satisfying themselves. Audrey Hepburn had said that "the beauty of a woman is not in a facial mode but the true beauty in a woman is reflected in her soul." It is what teenagers should remind. They have to find their inner beauty which is the most important and satisfy and love themselves

Minsung Kim/First draft/wed34

How to Stay Cool, Calm without stress

 

Waking up early in the morning, listening to lectures, tiring schedules would be stressful to anybody. People get stress from variety of sources. If stress is accumulated, it can cause bad health and mental depression, which can also affect people's life. It would become some changes of not only to outer body but also internally. Therefore, the best way to avoid this kind of situation is to relieve stress. There are three categories of activity that could help when people are suffering from huge stress; making a hobby, reading, and talking.

 

First, a nice hobby could make people stress-free. There are a great number of things that we can do such as exercise, reading, painting and so on. Focusing on what oneself like to do, and good at can make one forget about the reality's harmful environment. However there's one thing we have to be aware of. We have to remember that the goal of using hobbies is to temporarily take away our stress, not add to it. Therefore struggling to make a hoppy is an unnecessary move.

 

Also, according to the study of England success university, reading is also the best way to reduce stress. By just reading a book for only 6 minutes, the stress declines sharply. When reading a book, apart of people who are very harsh-minded, most people would be immersed in the scene of the book. He or she would be the hero of heroin of the book and can forget about all the stress and feel great by the hormone produced, adrenaline.

 

Lastly, we might feel better if we talk with our friends at a coffee house. Spending time with friends is a good way to get everything that bothers us out of our mind. For example, if we hang out with friends when we have stress from school. We can forget all about study and classmates. However, we have to be careful. If we spend too much time with your friends, we may not be able to get a satisfactory result from our work or school.

 

In conclusion, it is absolute necessary to reduce stress, because it is very unhealthy and it raises the risk for medical problems. There are numerous things that might help us stress-free, such as having a hobby, reading books, and talking with your friends, It would be good for us, if we are having a hard time in our life. Because we deserve to enjoy our life.

Seung Ji Lee / First Draft / Wed 3, 4

Dark Side of Social Media

             These days, so many people use social media. Thanks to it, people can communicate with someone on the other side of the world. Distance is no longer a factor that makes them lose contact with friends who study abroad or emigrate to other countries. However, there are also some problems of social media: users easily becoming addicted, irreversible uploaded contents, and possibility of being misused as a means of crime.

             First, it is easy to become addicted to social media. Social media allows real-time communication among anyone who uses it. Due to that characteristic, time goes so fast when people contact each other using social media. Also, it contains various contents. Sometimes, some include highly provocative contents, and a number of people are attracted by those. Thus, if one fails to control the time spent on using social media, then too much time is wasted.

             Another problem is that once the content is uploaded on social media, it is irreversible. Because of the biggest feature of social media, 'real-time communication', anything can be spread so fast since people can share it at any time. So, it is very hard to correct wrongly spread information. Usually, public opinion is formed based on gossips through social media and it leads to a severe witch-hunting.

             Finally, the possibility of social media being misused as a means of crime is the last problem. People can always be noticed what others are doing through their social media, and it is a big problem in some respects. For example, burglaries can be committed when people go on a trip. To be specific, as soon as they upload any pictures that allow others to know that their houses are vacated, some might think it is the perfect time to commit a burglary. Also, some people can suffer from stalking because anyone can get information about what they are doing in real time by searching for that person's social media. Sometimes this leads to an invasion of privacy.

             To wrap up, social media has several disadvantages. For users, it is easy to become addicted to social media. Also, the contents that are uploaded on social media are irreversible. In addition, it can be misused as a means of crime. Therefore, it is important to acknowledge the dark side of social media and use it wisely.

 

MInyoung Jang/first draft/wed 3-4

 As we can call the era of SELF, today people are very interested in self-doing like self-photograph, self-nail art, self-dyeing, and so on. Among them, 'self-interior' is most popular recently. Self-interior means decorating their house or room by oneself to one's taste without professional company. In the early 2000s, the popularity of self-interior that attracted by craze of 'DIY' (Do-It-Yourself) went slow. But now a days, the popularity revives because of effect of various social change. There are three primary reasons about why people's attention to self-interior becomes so high in recent years.

 

 First, the major cause why self-interior trend spreads recently is money. Self-interior is much cheeper than requesting professional interior company. If we request interior to company, we couldn't know how much the raw materials or services fee is. However, the great advantage of self-interior is we can do this with only raw materials' fee. Even, because we can compare the price from the market directly, we can buy materials that we want more cheeper. Also 'refrom' is the most useful way to decorate house. We don't need to buy new stuff to fill the space. By recycling already existing furniture, we can save money and refresh the atmosphere of our boring house.

 

 Another reason of popularity of self-interior is growth of single-person household. These days, single-person household who invests to oneself generously is increasing. Although living in their house while short period, they want to enhance satisfaction of life. It is also one of the reason that the meaning of house changes from just shelter to symbol of one's personality. As people who live alone persue emotional stability in their house, the desire decorating house with their own style increases.

 

 Finally, effect of media encourages people to take interest in self-interior. Now a days, TV programs about self-interior like "Dignity in my room" and "I'll give old house, Give me new house" occur gradually, and blogs about that are new trend. So because people are influenced by media, self-interior became trend among the young. In addition, through on-line community, and various SNS program, we can share vast information with people in all around the world. As sharing useful information each other, people pay attention more about self-interior and put in practice.

 

 In conclusion, there are different three reasons why self-interior trend spreads recently. Because there are advantages saving money, people attempt to do self-interior. Also, growth of single-person household's desire that wants to decorate their space with their taste is another reason. And effect of media about self-interior contributes the latest trend.

 

 

seo seung yeon/First draft/ wed34

Cram School, Not So Much Creamy.

The excitement students feel when last class's bell rings was magnificent. But nowadays, teenagers can't feel the excitement. Because they still have to go to a cram school. Cram schools are specialized schools that train students to pass the entrance examination of high schools or university. It's almost impossible to find a teenager who doesn't go to a cram school. But spending too much time in cram school is bad for teenager for three main reasons;

First, Studying in a cram school can steal self-study time from students. In cram school students take lessons that have already covered by teachers in school. Even if the cram school teaches things a head of schools curriculum, students have to take same lesson in school. Either way students have to take same class twice which seems inefficient. What students need to get a higher grades is self-study time rather repetition of hearing another person's knowledge.   

Next, going a head of school curriculum is physiologically wrong. There is a phrase written on the German school attendance notification. It says "You should aware disadvantages if your kids learn how to write before entrance into a school". Knowing human's brain develop by stages, German warns the bad impact of learning a head. Also teenagers need at least soled 8 hours of sleep to be fully functioning when they are awake. Generally Korea high school starts at 7a.m and ends at 10p.m. If they go to the cram school after or before the school, they can't secure the time to sleep.

Last but not least, teenagers need reflecting time which is hard to do when surrounded by yet another academically competitive environment. Teenagers go to the cram school to enter great college. But usually they don't know what they want to learn in the college. Without attentive reflecting time, it's easy to be swept away by what other people says. However that short teen period is a critical time to plan their life. Being overwhelmed by competitive environment like cram school will blind teenagers and make them think there is an only one goal going to the college.

There are three reasons why cram school can impact bad influence on teenagers. Cram school deprives teenagers of self-study time, ignores brain activity and interrupts self-reflection. When parents send their child to Cram school, they think they do what's best for their child. But sending child to cram school can have serious side–effects. So before consider enrolling in the cram school, parents should check how their child currently managing time and prerequisite reason for enrolling.

Sue Min Hwang/First Draft/Wed3,4

    The 20th century has been an era of countless wars which were mainly derived from ideological issues, It was due to these wars that coerced the world to strengthen their military power. Due to technological advancement and fluctuating international status, however, solely achieving military strength has become unneccessary. In this retrospect, instead of securing the military, ensuring sustained growth has become essential even more than fulfilling socio-economic needs. Also, while focusing on sustained growth, military security or socio-economic needs should not be neglected and should be kept in rough harmony.

    Currently, fuels and resources are at the stake of becoming deploited, and the birth rate is decreasing consistantly throughout the world. The shrunk birth rate has also made the population ratio unstable. The producing population has decreased while the consuming population has increased. As this phenomenon continues the internal domestic market will degenerate. In order to avoid any catastrophes which may occur because of this current stance, growing military strength or socio- economic needs will be with no avail. Securing sustained growth will be the solution to this problem. By investing on increasing the number and the quality of infrastructure or on incipient industries, it will stabilize nation's economy and minimalize defects which could happen from diminished producing populations as it can grow self-producing ability of a nation.  

        In addition, balance of the three feats;military, socio-economic and sustained growth is an important factor for the prosperity of a nation. In the 19th and the 20th century, balance had not been as important as it has been as it has been a state of imperialsm and  thus military had rather gained spotlight. After imperialism, ideological matters became important and due to democracy spreading, people began to concentrate on their well-being and demanded the government to focus on fulfilling their socio-ecnomic needs. Public's well-being has become a priority for the government and implemented laws regarding their demands. Recently the globalization consists a big amount in people's and the government's lives. For repuation and the happiness of a nation's citizens a country needs to accomplish all three feats centering on the newly introduced factor which is sustained growth. It is indeed hard to harmonize the new feats however it is inevitable since lacking in one feat easily leads to capsized stance in the overly competitive global community.

      Thus, sustained growth may resolve the problem of the deficient condition of the world such as the population and resources. Also, the balance will support the basic needs and rights of human. Therefore, the rough harmony of sustained growth, socio-economic needs and military should be continued.