The Importance of Traveling
Traveling has become essential in everyone's lives. As ways to go abroad have become much more easy and convenient over the past several decades, people have traveled at least once in their lives. Some might have traveled all around the world, and others just outside their hometown. In either case, one could say traveling takes up an important part of our lives in various ways.
First, traveling allows a person to broaden his/her perspective in life. One gets to meet people all over the world and experience their individual cultures in person. Understanding each and every culture can help break stereotypes one may have had before visiting the country. This eventually leads to opening up one's view in general, allowing him/her to become a more generous person. To briefly mention my story, last year winter I happened to go on a tour in New York. As it turned out, it was a Chinese tour! Although the guide and a few people did speak English, I could not help but feel uncomfortable. In fact I was initially nervous and a bit scared when with New Yorkers as well. After having a lot of time to talk with both the Chinese and New Yorkers, however, I realized my stupidity. They both turned out to be sincerely kind and giving people. In the end I had the opportunity to even get to know more about both cultures and their delicious traditional food. This made me realize how narrow-minded I was and helped widen my perspective.
Also, becoming friends with various types of people while traveling is matter-of-fact. Whether it be in exotic restaurants or even places one stays in, he/she has tons of ways to meet new people and communicate with them. This could eventually lead to better social skills and maybe even learning a new language. That was what happened to me in my Chinese tour in New York. I got to learn basic Chinese greetings and such. I still remember some of those and find them useful from time to time. After returning home one can also stay in contact with his/her worldwide friends by becoming pen pals. One might even get the chance to travel again with these newfound travel partners.
Lastly, traveling can be therapeutic. A lot of people tend to visit other places just to relieve stress and simply relax. This makes a person happier in life and very often enhances one's self-confidence. Exotic beaches could be decent places to visit, with the calm waves and cool breeze all around. Traveling to just about any new country will be refreshing both physically and mentally. To put it in a quite extreme way, people sometimes need to escape from reality and take a break. Traveling definitely makes life better and brighter.
To wrap up, traveling is beneficial in that it helps broaden one's perspective, allows one to meet worldwide friends, and is therapeutic. Without traveling, life would have been less exciting and less fascinating – basically less than what it is now.
Great! In body parapragh1, introducing your story is suitable. But I think that experience story part is little bit too long. If you add some more effect about talking and shorten your story, this essay becomes wonderful! In addition, why dont you try to make concluding part be noble?
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ReplyDeleteGreat first draft! The ideas were applicable and reasonable, however within the essay instead of writing he/she it should be changed into a more formal language.
EunYoung Kim / Final Draft / Wed 3-4
ReplyDeleteThe Importance of Traveling
Traveling has become essential in everyone’s lives. As ways to go abroad have become much more easy and convenient over the past several decades, people have traveled at least once in their lives. Some might have traveled all around the world, and others just outside their hometown. In either case, one could say traveling takes up an important part of our lives in various ways.
First, traveling allows a person to broaden one’s perspective in life. One gets to meet people all over the world and experience their individual cultures in person. Understanding each and every culture can help break stereotypes one may have had before visiting the country. This eventually leads to opening up one’s view in general, allowing oneself to become a more generous person. To briefly mention my story, last year winter I happened to go on a Chinese tour in New York. Although the guide and a few people did speak English, I could not help but feel uncomfortable. After having a lot of time to talk with both the Chinese and New Yorkers, however, I realized my stupidity. They both turned out to be sincerely kind and giving people. In the end I had the opportunity to even get to know more about both cultures and their delicious traditional food. This made me realize how narrow-minded I was and helped widen my perspective.
Also, becoming friends with various types of people while traveling is matter-of-fact. Whether it be in exotic restaurants or even places one stays in, there are tons of ways to meet new people and communicate with them. This could eventually lead to better social skills and maybe even learning a new language. That was what happened to me in my Chinese tour in New York. I got to learn basic Chinese greetings and such. I still remember some of those and find them useful from time to time. After returning home one can also stay in contact with these new worldwide friends by becoming pen pals. One might even get the chance to travel again with these newfound travel partners.
Lastly, traveling can be therapeutic. A lot of people tend to visit other places just to relieve stress and simply relax. This makes a person happier in life and very often enhances one’s self-confidence. Exotic beaches could be decent places to visit, with the calm waves and cool breeze all around. Traveling to just about any new country will be refreshing both physically and mentally. To put it in a quite extreme way, people sometimes need to escape from reality and take a break. Traveling definitely makes life better and brighter.
To wrap up, traveling is beneficial in that it helps broaden one’s perspective, allows one to meet worldwide friends, and is therapeutic. Without traveling, life would have been less exciting and less fascinating – basically less than what it is now. Therefore, everyone should make the time to visit new places when given the chance.