Dark Side of Social Media
These days, so many people use social media. Thanks to it, people can communicate with someone on the other side of the world. Distance is no longer a factor that makes them lose contact with friends who study abroad or emigrate to other countries. However, there are also some problems of social media: users easily becoming addicted, irreversible uploaded contents, and possibility of being misused as a means of crime.
First, it is easy to become addicted to social media. Social media allows real-time communication among anyone who uses it. Due to that characteristic, time goes so fast when people contact each other using social media. Also, it contains various contents. Sometimes, some include highly provocative contents, and a number of people are attracted by those. Thus, if one fails to control the time spent on using social media, then too much time is wasted.
Another problem is that once the content is uploaded on social media, it is irreversible. Because of the biggest feature of social media, 'real-time communication', anything can be spread so fast since people can share it at any time. So, it is very hard to correct wrongly spread information. Usually, public opinion is formed based on gossips through social media and it leads to a severe witch-hunting.
Finally, the possibility of social media being misused as a means of crime is the last problem. People can always be noticed what others are doing through their social media, and it is a big problem in some respects. For example, burglaries can be committed when people go on a trip. To be specific, as soon as they upload any pictures that allow others to know that their houses are vacated, some might think it is the perfect time to commit a burglary. Also, some people can suffer from stalking because anyone can get information about what they are doing in real time by searching for that person's social media. Sometimes this leads to an invasion of privacy.
To wrap up, social media has several disadvantages. For users, it is easy to become addicted to social media. Also, the contents that are uploaded on social media are irreversible. In addition, it can be misused as a means of crime. Therefore, it is important to acknowledge the dark side of social media and use it wisely.
There's nothing to correct or improve about the organization !
ReplyDeleteBut I think if your title of the eassy was more creative, it coulld help to grab the reader's attention. Also, adding your final thought, which is impressive, in your concluding paragraph would be helpful, in my opinion.
Yong-yoon Cho : How about writing concluding paragraph using different words?
ReplyDeletewell written. you depicted three main reasons why social media is bad. I love your third reason and examples that you use to prove the point. but if i suggest some opinion.
ReplyDelete1. Finally, the possibility of social media being misused as a means of crime is the last problem. in this sentence remove 'last' you already said finally at the first.
2. add some more content on the conclusion.
good!
Seung Ji Lee / First Draft / Wed 3, 4
ReplyDeleteThe Dark Side of Social Media
These days, many people use social media. Thanks to it, people can communicate with someone on the other side of the world. Distance is no longer a factor that makes them lose contact with friends who study abroad or emigrate to other countries. However, there are also some drawbacks of social media: users easily becoming addicted, irreversible uploaded contents, and possibility of being misused as a means of crime.
First, it is easy to become addicted to social media. Social media allows real-time communication among anyone who uses it. Due to that characteristic, time goes very fast when people contact each other using social media. Also, it contains various contents. Sometimes, some include highly provocative contents, and a number of people are attracted by those. Thus, if one fails to control the time spent on using social media, then too much time is wasted.
Another problem is that once the content is uploaded on social media, it is irreversible. Because of the biggest feature of social media, 'real-time communication', anything can be spread very quickly since people can share it at any time. Therefore, it is very hard to correct wrongly spread information. Usually, public opinion is formed based on gossips through social media and it leads to a severe witch-hunting.
ReplyDeleteFinally, the possibility of social media being misused as a means of crime is the last problem. People can always be noticed what others are doing through their social media, and it is a big problem in some respects. For example, burglaries can be committed when people go on a trip. To be specific, as soon as they upload any pictures that allow others to know that their houses are vacated, some might think it is the perfect time to commit a burglary. Also, some people can suffer from stalking because anyone can get information about what they are doing in real time by searching for that person's social media. Sometimes this leads to an invasion of privacy.
To wrap up, social media has several disadvantages. For users, it is easy to become addicted to social media. Also, the contents that are uploaded on social media are irreversible. In addition, it can be misused as a means of crime. Therefore, it is important to acknowledge the dark side of social media and use it wisely.
I'm sorry I wrongly posted the second part of the final draft.
ReplyDeleteAnother problem is that once the content is uploaded on social media, it is irreversible. Because of the biggest feature of social media, 'real-time communication', anything can be spread very quickly since people can share it at any time. Therefore, it is very hard to correct wrongly spread information. Usually, public opinion is formed based on gossips through social media and it leads to a severe witch-hunting.
Finally, the possibility of social media being misused as a means of crime is the last problem. People can always be noticed what others are doing through their social media, and it is a big problem in some respects. For example, burglaries can be committed when people go on a trip. To be specific, as soon as they upload any pictures that allow others to know that their houses are vacated, some might think it is the perfect time to commit a burglary. Also, some people can suffer from stalking because anyone can get information about what they are doing in real time by searching for that person's social media. Sometimes this leads to an invasion of privacy.
To wrap up, social media has several disadvantages. For users, it is easy to be hooked on social media. Also, the contents that are uploaded on social media are very hard to correct or erase. In addition, it can be wrongfully used as a means of crime. Social media is a double-edged sword. It has many useful functions, but there are also problems. Therefore, it is important to acknowledge the dark side of social media and use it wisely.