Min-sung Kim
University students can have three benefits by having a positive mind.
First, people speak as they think. By just thinking positively, they would feel great. But word has power; imprinting, towing, and achieving. If students say something out of their mouth, that would be imprinted in their brain. That would lead to output which is beneficial and they would fulfill what they wanted.
Also, they would love themselves and that can lead to growing self-respect. If they live positive-minded, everything they see would look bright. So whatever they do would be done effectively and more successfully. Therefore, they can be more confident to any situation.
Finally, they can easily get along with people. If they think positively, people would know that by their facial expressions and conversations they have with people. That would make people think they are kind and good person and more people would approach to them.
In short, if university students tend to be positive, students can easily can do anything they want, grow self-esteem, and socialize with other people.
How about adding sentance saying that thinking positively leads to say positive words?
ReplyDeleteYeoroom Lee
ReplyDeleteI suggest you replace the word 'good person' in the 4th paragraph as 'cheerful' to make that sentece meaning more telling and united.
It'd also be better in last paragraph, the conclusion sentence, replacing 'tend to be positive' as 'get start positive' to show the point clearly, not inclination but right will.
Choi Jaeyoon:
ReplyDeleteI think your topic 'Three benefits by having a positive mind' is not limited to only university students. It will be better if you change the topic a little bit more specific for university students in my opinion.
Be positive, be happy.
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