Topic Causes of stress among university students
Topic sentence - Main causes that drive stress to college students can be specified in to 3way.
Supporting points
1. Future ambiguity
2. Grade
3. Social relationship
Main causes that drive stress to college students can be specified in to 3way.
First, Future ambiguity makes college students anxious. Back in high school they had a relatively clear goal which is to go to the college. And they made it. They finally entered in the college which means they have to start to search for new goals. They are aware of that they are going through a transition period. Students are aware of that this period is important for it would ultimately determine future career. So they feel pressure to going through transition period well. However it's nearly impossible to find out which is the correct answer. Because correct answers are differs by every students which generates ambiguity.
Second, grade is one of the driving factors for college student's stress. They all are well known of importance of grades since it determines from dorm acceptance to future career. All students want to have a great grade, but not all students can get an A. It's cold hard relative evaluation. Only upper 30% can get an A. So we should step on our class mates to get a good grade. Also to get a great grade they have to do a load of homework. After one week they get a fresh new homework to do which requires time and ability.
Third, managing social relationship can get college students in a stressful situation. Social life in college and high school are a lot different. In high school students become friends with just classmates. In the college students are strongly recommended to be friends with not only peers but also senior and junior. Especially in Korea things can be trickier because of age. Your senior can be a lot younger than you which generates complex social problem.
To wrap up, college students get various kind of stress which could be narrowed down in to 3ways which is future ambiguity, grades and social relationship
Chae Won Kim
ReplyDelete1. the main point is : 3 reasons that make university life stressful.
2. you picked very core supporting points. they are basic but important why we get stress.
3. the most striking part was in the first-reason-part. from highschool life to university life, it is expressed well.
4. i think you should put commas in your sentences. i could't get the subjects and verbs very first because of the absences of commas.
5. in my opinion, if you add more sentences in the intro-part and last-part, your draft can be more flowing.
The main causes of stress for college students can be divided into three categories.
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