2016/03/13

Yeji Oh/ First draft/ Wed3,4

Causes of stress among university students

Oh yeji

 

There are plenty of causes why university students get stresses.First, stress is caused by our invisible future. When we were in the highschool, we always have our dream of a beautiful future, living as the person who is always called as a 'successful man'. But when we come to school. we know and feel that living life as an adult is not that easy.

Another common reason is because we are not sure about our major. When we go to university, we choose our own major. And when before we enter the school we all have our own roman about their majors. But after entering the school and taking classes, they get confused and have questions that whether their major is appropriate with them and their campus lives are not same as their imagination. If their answer is 'not appropriate', they have to find the measures of it and get stress, though their answer is 'appropriate', because not everything in major is about our imagination, we get stress again

Finally, some students get stress by high intuition fee. Unlike most of the highschools, universities' fee is very high-much higher than students expected. So many of the students use loan and work hard to repay money. Also, they have to care about the interest of the money and have to pay for it too.

To sum up, university students' stress is caused by a variety of reasons: because of our invisible future, because we are not sure about our major, because of high intuition fee.

2 comments:

  1. Yang seunghyeok: I liked your paragraghs because you dealt with our, university student's challenges. You also compared university life with highschool's and I liked it.

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  2. Seung Ji Lee :
    The main point is that there are three reasons why university students get stresses. What I liked about the thrid paragraph was that you mentioned university students' sad reality. Also, what struck me as powerful was that I could fully empathize with your first reason. What is not clear was the sixth line of the second paragraph because that sentence is too long and it is hard to understand. So the one change you could make that would make the biggest improvement in this paragraph is making that sentence briefer or dividing that into two sentences so readers can read and understand it easily. Then it would be more perfect!

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