In modern digital age, many people enjoy SNS, such as facebook, instagram and twiiter. SNS become flow leading these days. Why do people enjoy SNS? There are variety of reasons.
First, many people enjoy SNS for communicate with other people. This communicate has various aspects. Most people communicate friends and others because of wondering each other's life. But some people communicate others for excessive self splurge and criticism of specific people sometimes
Next, many people enjoy SNS for utilizing variety content. For example, facebook has a variety video, such as exciting highlight of sport and drama. also facebook has helpful informations , such as life tips and sport tips. As such these, SNS has variety content having extensive information but these information not always accurate information. so we should always distinguish weather right information
Finally, people enjoy SNS for earning money. In SNS world, companies invest to SNS member having many follower for advertising. These SNS member are called 'SNS star' Have you heard word SNS star?. They really make money by using SNS. Sometimes these things are often a nuisance to society because so-called sns star not hesitate their destructive behavior For example recently famous SNS star posts video that he hit other SNS member who criticize him. reason of this are seen for public interest making money
As indicated above, There are many reason for enjoying sns And many reason have twofoldness
Chae Won Kim
ReplyDeleteAdd : last sentence - supporting points again
(remove or)Replace : last line of 2nd paragraph - 'splurge and criticism' to 'splurge or criticism'
I suggest you that it would be better to add supporting points at your last paragraph. It's too short.
ReplyDeleteDongwon Kang : it would be better to make conclusion sentence more specific by restating or paraphrasing supporting points that you mentioned above
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